Rochelle’s weekly one hundred word flash fiction challenge, prompted by the picture:

It seemed such a simple, yet clever, idea: find something inconspicuous to use as a snorkel, then swim underwater, past the guard station, to freedom. So here am I; head a metre and a half below the surface, breathing through the tubes of an old chair, which is snagged fast in the reeds above. If I do a lot of tugging and thrashing to free the chair, I will be shot, if I don’t drown first. The alternative is to surface and run for it. The camp graveyard is full of those who tried that tactic. What to do? (99)

PHOTO PROMPT – © Dale Rogerson


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25 Responses to Snorkel

  1. Really creative, Mick. I’m now hoping he makes it. It’s hard not to hope the underdog succeeds. 🙂 — Suzanne

  2. Margaret says:

    He’s so inventive, he deserves to escape. Great story.

  3. Very original take on the prompt Mick, and i liked the open ending. Well written

  4. ansumani says:

    The narration pulled me into the water and into the escapee’s dilemma….Well done narration.

  5. That little chair part on the left side reminded me of a snorkel, too. You did a bang-up job with the idea. Kudos

  6. gahlearner says:

    He’s caught between a rock and a hard place. With a prison like that, I can only root for anyone wanting to escape. Talking about roots… Great take on the prompt.

  7. Amy Reese says:

    It seems like quite the dicey situation you painted here. I hope someone can save the day! Well done.

  8. Alice Audrey says:

    Well, you carefully reach up through the reeds… Not that I’ve ever tried it.

    Nice conundrum.

  9. Melanie says:

    Seems death will be the outcome either way, though I hope he makes it. Good story!

  10. plaridel says:

    perhaps he should wait for nighttime and make a run for it. or he should take his underwear off and use it as a sort of white flag and tell them not to shoot.

  11. Dave says:

    Race between figuring out an escape and hypothermia… There’s a whole novel chapter in it.

  12. I got anxious on his behalf. Don’t thrash…be cool…ay yi yi

  13. Dale says:

    I guess in his moment of panic, he’s not thinking of uprooting the reeds… Great take!

  14. Great take on this prompt. It almost seems funny to think of the person using this crazy snorkel but it is believable.

  15. Our yearn for freedom often overpowers any sense of danger. Good piece.

  16. draliman says:

    I’d say this guy is in a lot of trouble! Quite a decision to make.

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